#15

do you feel you have achieved what you wanted to achieve? I do feel that i have acheived a lot in this class. I walked into this class with little knowledge that i thought was a lot to know about writing. Coming into this class I fpound writing to be difficult but improved my writing skills alot. Would you in anyway change those goals now that you are more familiar with college level writing? Now that i am familiar with the college level writing, I wouldnt change my goals because it i believe that this class, the professor made me a better writer and helped me improve in my weaknesses to a paper. In addition to reflecting back on those goals, you also need to outline how you would like to continue to grow as a writer. What strengths would you like to continue to develop? What are your weaknesses that you know you still need to work on? To continue to grow as a writer, i think i will use the method i recently been using, and thats to brainstorm, make an outline, and write all my ideas and thoughts out on paper because thats what helps me be more creative and help me find a clear thesis for my paper and for the audience to understand. For strengths, I would like to work on expanding my ideas, I have so much ideas for the papers i write just I dont know how to briefly explain them well enough. As of my weaknesses, I need to focus on improving my organization. I tend to write and have paragraphs not in the right order to make my paper more understandable and clear. Another thing would be stating my thesis more clear too. Sometimes I know what my thesis is but hard to write on paper because I dont know how to write. But as i continue as a writer, i will improve on both strenghts and weaknesses.

#13

I analyzed the Free Speech off Campus Must be Protected essay. The author’s strongest points to support his evidence were the examples he brought up, such as the boy who had died from hazing.The author had described himself in this essay as a lawyer. I feel that the author had did a good job briefly explainging both sides of the arguement. Providing a plethora of information, having the reader think a lot of what point he was trying to make. This article had helped me better by argument paper by brefily explaining both sides of the arguements, having a reflection on the artical, and examples that can better the arguementive paper.

#12

Topic: Parents give more freedom to their sons and not their daughters. And I dont agree that parents should be more lenient to their sons instead of both sons and daughters. Thesis: I dont agree of boys having the ability to get more freedom from their parents and their daughters get so little of it. Parents should be protective of both kids and give them the same kind of freedom. Compelling Arguement: Why do parents give more freedom to their sons instead of giving the same kind of freedom to both their sons and daughters? Parents have different mindsets of how to raise their children. There are major issues that stop parents giving their daughters more freedom, such as not being able to trust them well enough, being double standard to their kids, sometimes the race-ethnicity playes a huge role in the families as to why parents are strict, another one could be the media. All these major issues are what keep parents from not letting their daughters out and I dont think its fair because anything that can happen to their daughter can also happen to their sons. Such as a girl getting raped, well a boy can get shot or jumped by a gang. Freedom should be played equal to both bos and girls. Weak arguement: Parents worry over their daughters more because they are not known to be tough and be abke to handle their own business. Parents like to be overprotective with their daughters, expecially if shes their only daughter. I understand parents dont want nothing to happen to their daughters becuase there such good girls and dont deserve any violence. Parents dont think the daughters are old enough to hang out with their friends. This is weak because there isnt much to let an audience know about why parents keep their daughters inside rather than out on the streets. I argue that there should be equal freedom because everyone goes throough something, you can be in the right place or wrong place at the right or wrong time, it still will happen to anyone. Parents need to realize that they should give their trust out in order to see what their daughters can do with it.

#14

For my portfolio I decided to revise my ad analysis paper. I picked that essay because that was my highest grade on a paper for this class, so thought I try and improve it for my final paper. My strengths for this would be describing the ad, giving examples about the ad, and having a strong thesis. My weakness for this paper would be not having a clear organized paper, somewhat irrelevant statements, and run on sentences. By revising my paper, I have decided to work on my strengths by making them stronger, having a clearer thesis, try expanding my description of the ad. By doing that, I have decided to brainstorm on paper, put down all m ideas and descriptions of the ad, and think about what other way I can write a better and improved revised paper. For my weaknesses I will try an improve my organization and havinging concise statesmets. By doing that I will re-read my paper to see if it makes sense to the audience, and gives a good tone. In order for my organization to improve I would have to go through my paragraphs to see which follow which.

#11

in my writing i tend to have a bunch of run on sentence, repeat the same thing in other paragraphs, and having a bunch of ideas not placed in correct order. These three errors I think are my main errors in the paper and they cause a lot of unorganized ideas to be all of over the place. So for the future I would have to spend more time on my papers and really look for the errors and organized my paper much better to recieve a better grade. But at times it gets hard to think how you can anaylze a visual to 5-4 pages, thats why I tend to repeat sentences i have said earlier in the paper.

#10

In a way I think peer review is effective but also feel that it isnt helpful. It can be effective in a way because sometimes the reviewers know what their talking about but then again sometimes they dont. Thats where the less effective in peer reviewing comes in. The reviewers just give us feedback on about what they think should be fixed. When really there is other major errors that have to be fixed, we just dont know which ones. How it can be improved? I really don't know. I feel that for us to get better at our papers and our writing methods, we should be peer reviewing with a person who is professional or has much more experience in writing then some students.I think my strenghts as a peer reviewer would be looking out for the grammar and repeated sentences. When I give feedback I like to tell give an example of how the paragraphs should be organized. But nothing really else. For my weakness, I think finding a thesis and knowing the main reason why the writer wrote the paper. And also finding out the tone of the paper, sometimes reading it silently I cant really specify the writers tone.Like I said I do find it helpful in some ways but then not really. Because you have students who know how to peer review, check for errors, tell you if the paper is good when really it isn't in a teachers point of view. So it could be helpful but then not really in my opinion. I dont think it matters with small or large groups of students, just matters on what the student tells you about the paper and if it really is helpful. The time limit for peer review is fine, its an appropriate amount of time. We get enough time to talk about everyone's paper and recieve feedback on it.

#9

Out of the three assignments we have worked on, I found the advertisement essay difficult. It was very hard to write a 3-4 paper so that the audience can visualize the advertisement without taking a glance at it. I thought it would be one, two, three, and I'm done but I noticed I had spent a lot of time on this essay. And when we usually do peer review so we can recieve feedback, that really didn't help me for this paper. I had to have someone really look over it and get better feedback so I can improve my paper. The easiest essay so far in this class, would probably be the first essay, Literacy narrative. Even though I recieved a horrible grade on it, I still think I had many details and facts for this paper. At first when I wrote this paper I thought I was the only person to write it the way I did, butI wasn't and kind of felt relieved. The peer review group I had then really did well on giving me feedback and reminding me of what needs to be added into my paper. I think I found it easy because it was like a personal experience, so I just jotted down what came to mind for this specific topic. Im not sure why this is so but I think because I was never assigned to visualize an advertisement paper from 3-4 pages. So to really be descriptive and detailed was very difficult to make into 3-4 pages.